Wednesday, November 03, 2010


Snippets from the work in progress. Think Firefly meets Dark Angel meets Terminator...
(and remember this is rough copy. I'm working on it...)

"Someone approached. She steeled herself. The chain around her wrist went tight as she was pulled across the dirt. Fighting it was useless, she didn’t have the strength. Let them kill her now and get this nightmare over with. She was too tired to fight anymore.
“You’ve had your chance to repent. None of this would have happened if it weren’t for you and your kind. This is your fault.” He yanked her hair back and clamped his hand around her throat. “One last time before I get rid of you.” "

"He resisted slamming his fist through the glass. His rage had him wanting, no, needing to wrap his hands around her neck and watch the light leave her eyes. She’d taken Mercy. Taken his baby. The bitch’s face was burned into his mind. She’d snatched his child out of her crib without the slightest hint of remorse or regret. He didn’t care that she was some kind of brain washed government drone.
It didn’t matter. Revenge burned in his gut and he could almost understand why Mackinaw had taken great delight in torturing her. He wanted to make her pay. There was no way he’d lower himself to Mac’s standards though. If he killed her, it’d be quick."

So there you go. Oh, and it's different men in each section. The second snippet is the hero. And everyone wants to kill the heroine.

Back to work.


Ava Quinn said...

Awesome! I like that everyone wants to kill the heroine. Call me twisted. It's like the ear piece thing.

Victoria said...

Thanks, Ava!
And yes, you are twisted, but then so am I.

Susan Gourley/Kelley said...

I like it. Evil man. Misguided man. Heroic woman. Perfect story.

Victoria said...

Thanks, Sue! I think I finally turned the corner with it today. Finally!

Natalie J. Damschroder said...

Very cool!